Some people believe that music should be taught in schools, while others think that it is best to focus on computer and science.Discuss both views and your opinion.

A few individuals assert that classes related to

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ought to be taken in the

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, whereas others opine that curriculum should be confined to computer and science. I intend to discuss both the views in the subsequent paragraphs followed by my own opinion. On the one hand, those who favour the latter view believe that extensive study is required to grasp important

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especially computer and science. It is primarily due to the fact that learning these

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not only requires theoretical knowledge

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needs a practical one. Owing to

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, more time is required to understand thoroughly different aspects of these

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, in order to learn about mechanics in physics, understanding of both theoretical knowledge of laws of mechanics as well as respective practicals are essential.

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. proponents of the former view assert that

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plays a vital role in relaxing the minds of young ones in the

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. It is generally seen that

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get tired of studying different

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, they are more likely to get bored with these

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situation can even make them dull, thereby becoming a roadblock for their cognitive development. It cannot be tackled effectively unless the

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is introduced in the curriculum to refresh them. To illustrate, in 2018, secondary schools in Japan made it essential for its

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to learn one musical instrument in order to create more interest at

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premises. In my perspective,

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cannot be ignored at the

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level because it can entice some pupils to choose

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as their career. To explain, some

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have more interest in

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than other

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, they often fail to achieve success in

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domain because schools do not provide appropriate training and mentors. If proper knowledge and tuition are provided in

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during an earlier age, it is more likely that some

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can achieve their ambitions in

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. To conclude, even though studying science and computers requires more time, still

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I believe that other art

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cannot be overlooked as these are conducive in terms of holistic development of the child as well as pursuing a

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career in future.