some people think that using mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries and public transport.To what extent do you agree with this statement ?

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It is considered by many that using mobile phones in public
places
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as in libraries,public transport and retail malls ought to be prohibited.In my opinion,mobile
devices
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provide an ample amount of benefits in our daily lives,
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I completely disagree with
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statement.
Firstly
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,cellular
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can be very useful in case of emergencies
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as accidents,medical emergencies and crime.
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,
people
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who have sick or elderly family members and parents expecting a call from their child,its important in
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genuine emergencies to carry a cell phone at all times even though they are in public
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.
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,mobile
devices
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could play an important part of
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commute to work,
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instance
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to report an accident or any medical emergency having 911 service at the touch of a button is very crucial to save lives.
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,it helps navigate directions if lost somewhere in midst of a car break down.
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,
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the usage
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of mobile
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in public
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with limited usage is acceptable and can be essential in addressing urgent issues.
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,mobile
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can provide entertainment when travelling on
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journey,especially on public transport.While phones can be helpful to unwind from a chaotic day by accessing various media platforms
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as youtube,podcasts and other streaming applications ,young
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tend to explore the creative features of it
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as photography and videography.
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,film aspirants make use of smartphone cameras when they are in public
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to showcase their
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photography
skills and post them on social media, while they draw a lot of attention from
people
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who are in search of new talent, they
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use it for building their career.
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mobile
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can be advantageous for all these reasons,
overusage
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overuse
leads to other problems
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as stress as well as anxiety. In
conlcusion
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conclusion
,banning mobile phones in public
places
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is a downside for
people
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using public transport and other public
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,
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however
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they can be used with some restrictions for a limited time that can be beneficial for all.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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