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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some citizens think that culprits who commit less serious criminal activities should be forced to do some volunteer task for neighbourhood
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 of sending them into the prison. I completely accord with the statement that free
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 job would be beneficial for the authority.
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, engaged criminals will
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 get a chance of rehabilitation. In
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 essay, I will discuss both the views with appropriate examples.
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 with, one of the most effective as well as a beneficial form of punishment for the offenders is to make them
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 without any compensation.
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, it is impactful both for the government and
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 services
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 as garbage picking, snow removing from walkways and roads painting are always considered as a financial burden for the government.
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 more, it is always considered as a good substitute if it would be done by the culprits of minor crimes.
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, many western countries
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 works of several weeks in
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 small
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 like burglary and chain-snatching. Overall, free work for local
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 could be a better form of punishment for mild
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, culprits of minor criminal
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 could get a chance of rehabilitation.
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, they will understand the importance of laws after helping
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 and they are higher possibilities that they will become law-abiding citizens of the nation. Eventually, They will not commit any kind of crime in future if they would realize their duties towards
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. In general,
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 most significant form to get criminals of smaller crimes back into
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. To recapitulate, I fully agree the statement that criminals who take part in mild
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 should be forced to perform volunteer
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 work
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 as trash picking and painting the
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 centre as a part of the punishment. In future, with
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 kind of treatment, the government will save some of their financial budget's cost.
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