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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#universities #colleges #qualifications #distance #internet #teachers #classroom #development
Due to the effect of
Corona
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 Virus, most of the schools, especially the universities, have been teaching
students
 and grant them diplomas online.
However
, whether
this
 trend is positive or not is still controversial. In my opinion, I believe that the drawbacks of teaching online are much more than the advantages. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate both sides by presenting some proper examples, and
finally
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 draw out my own opinion. On the one hand, it is true that studying via
internet
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 can bring many temporary benefits.
Firstly
 it is the securest way for both tutors and
students
 under the global pandemic. Because the fewer people gather, the less possibility to get the illness. Meanwhile, for international
students
, most of the online teaching software provides subtitle and playback functions, so it is beneficial for
this
 group of
students
 to learn a particular subject in a foreign language.
On the other hand
, in the long term, the teaching quality will be definitely suffered if we keep learning our major online.one of the obvious
drawback
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 is that learning from the screen undoubtedly decreases the instant interaction between professors and learners, which is quite a foundation for a decent education.
Furthermore
, for the science majors,
for instance
, they need to do a great number of experiments,
hence
, some undergraduates may choose their university for the progressive labs. So, the face-to-face class can facilitate
this
 group of
students
 to conduct the experiments to truly master the theories they’ve learned. In conclusion, even though
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online curricular can solve the problem temporarily, it should never be considered as the main method for
students
 to earn their education degrees.
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