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School should not force children to learn a foreign language.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that
school
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 should not be forced to
children
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learn
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 an overseas
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. While I find
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 view of some justifiable to some extent, I
also
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 argue that learning alien
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 compulsory may have adverse effects. On the one hand, there are vital aspects that cannot be overlooked in a favor of learning of foreign
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. It must be admitted that acquire knowledge of
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language
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 is open the door for
children
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 who want to their career abroad.
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, Through English
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language
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 youngster help get
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 to graduate from famous universities and leave
standard
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the standard
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 of living in the future.
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, going to learn
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another
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 apart from mother tongue to know about foreign culture.
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, many
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 organize
visit
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a visit
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of
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overseas
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the overseas
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 country which
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children
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.
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, I strongly believe that schoolchildren ought not to learn a foreign
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forcely
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forcibly
. One reason is that if
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force
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 to
children
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 to study, They may lose their Interest of learning
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. by
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this
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 many
children
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 will be
illiterated
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illiterate
illustrated
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 which may help them in the future.
In addition
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other
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 argument is not required to learn
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another
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 because
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they will never need to use or want in the future.
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, Indian citizens do not take knowledge of languages
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 as Urdu, Arabic and Chinese If they cannot use in
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 time. In conclusion, in
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light of about discussion, it can be concluded that learning a foreign
language
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school
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 should not be forced to do.

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