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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a broad consensus amongst individuals that living in
the
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another planet should be necessary for human generation in the near future.Investing in research for other planets have been seen as advisable to keep
humandkind
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humankind
 alive. In my opinion, there are plenty of matters should be handled as a
first
 priority
such
 as
,
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 poverty,
education
 and other facilities for increased
life
 quality and
also
 anyone can not
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guaranteed
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 that living in other planets are certain.
To begin
 with, there are many urgent issues, which affect human
life
, have been waiting
to
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 solution by authorities. For
this
 reason,
money
 should be spent
for
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 main problematic issues
for
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 instance, poverty and
education
. By doing
this
, many people are able to have a chance to live in higher
life
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 standards. Especially, with giving
education
 to everyone equally, awareness about
environment
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the environment
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 can be increased and people are able to preserve the world like never before.
Moreover
, researches show that half of
world
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the world
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 have been suffering from deficient of
balanced
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 diet and shortage of water.
Hence
,
investment
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 should be on the fundamental problem as
a
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 main
prority
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priority
 with regards to human rights.
Secondly
, it is important to bear in mind that there is a
possiblity
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possibility
 for researching space may be fruitlessness.
For example
, humans have been looking for
a evidence
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evidence
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 to demonstrate that
life
 of outside the world can be possible
throughtout
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throughout
 two century and they have had nothing yet.
Thus
,
instead
 of spending
money
for
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 activities that may not be
positive
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 consequence,
money
 should be spent
for
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 humans primary needs. To conclude,
nevertheless
, some individuals opinion's about spending
money
 on space research can be beneficial for
existence
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the existence
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 of human creatures, many issues
such
 as
,
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 poverty,
education
 and fundamental facilities have been seen as main problems for humans and they have been deserving primary focus and there is a
possiblity
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possibility
 for nothing may not come out
end
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 of the research.
Instead
 of retrenchment,
money
 should be spent
for
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 basic problems
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