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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a broad consensus amongst individuals that living in
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another planet should be necessary for human generation in the near future.Investing in research for other planets have been seen as advisable to keep
humandkind
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humankind
 alive. In my opinion, there are plenty of matters should be handled as a
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 priority
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 poverty,
education
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 and other facilities for increased
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 quality and
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guaranteed
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 that living in other planets are certain.
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, have been waiting
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 solution by authorities. For
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 reason,
money
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 should be spent
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 main problematic issues
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for
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 instance, poverty and
education
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. By doing
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, many people are able to have a chance to live in higher
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life
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 standards. Especially, with giving
education
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 to everyone equally, awareness about
environment
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the environment
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 can be increased and people are able to preserve the world like never before.
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, researches show that half of
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 have been suffering from deficient of
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 diet and shortage of water.
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,
investment
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 should be on the fundamental problem as
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 main
prority
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priority
 with regards to human rights.
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, it is important to bear in mind that there is a
possiblity
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possibility
 for researching space may be fruitlessness.
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, humans have been looking for
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 to demonstrate that
life
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 of outside the world can be possible
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throughout
 two century and they have had nothing yet.
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,
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 of spending
money
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for
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 activities that may not be
positive
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a positive
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 consequence,
money
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 should be spent
for
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 humans primary needs. To conclude,
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, some individuals opinion's about spending
money
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 on space research can be beneficial for
existence
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the existence
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 of human creatures, many issues
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 poverty,
education
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 and fundamental facilities have been seen as main problems for humans and they have been deserving primary focus and there is a
possiblity
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possibility
 for nothing may not come out
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 of the research.
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 of retrenchment,
money
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 should be spent
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 basic problems

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