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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problems?

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The management of criminals and the control of their activities and behaviour affect
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society
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 as a whole.
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, in our modern
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, it is common to see criminals
commiting
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committing
 more
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 after serving in
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 happen and what measures should be taken to reduce its incidence. To start with, the importance of understanding human
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 arouses in order to concatenate the possible reasons to explain the increasing levels of
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commited
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committed
 after
prison
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. Psychologists have developed a theory that defends that human
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 is resultant from its surroundings.
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, if a person lives with
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 who tend to not pay respect for the
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law, they will, probably, be stimulated to repeat
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 same
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. A study published in England showed that sixty per cent of
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 who go to jail had been living in a criminal environment previously in life.
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, usually,
people
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 who commit
crimes
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 are still being seen as criminals after serving in
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;
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, they might have problems to be accepted in
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society
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 or hired in some job position. It is
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 important to point out that developing a policy to help
people
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 who commit
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 to improve their behaviour is an
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 difficult task.
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, partnerships between the government and private corporations could increase the number of opportunities for those
prisoners
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 who want to work with dignity and start a new life. Denmark, for
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,
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 been doing that for the past ten years and the results are outstanding. Offering job positions for former
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 has helped to reduce the number of those who tend to go back to criminal activities due to lack of opportunities. Another possible solution should be encouraging
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 while in
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 to attend classes and study programs to aprimorate their abilities and increase the chances of being accepted again in the future. To conclude,
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 subject needs a more profound observance, I believe that
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this
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 phenomenon happens not only because
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 are influenced by their peers but
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 because former
prisoners
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 have problems being accepted in the
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. Developing a partnership between the government and
private
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 sector to create job opportunities for former
prisoners
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 and encouraging
people
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 who live in
prison
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 to study or develop some ability might mitigate
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 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
  • mental health issues
  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
  • incarceration
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