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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Hello Mr Michael, Hope you are doing well after your long trip from London to your home country. My name is Shadi Alkhatib, we met each other in the plane where I was sitting next to you. During the trip, I requested your help to get a job at one of your restaurants. As we discussed, I graduated from Philadelphia University in 2015 with a degree in business administration;
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, I have eight years of experience in managing restaurants and hotels.
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, I was a restaurant manager for McDonald's fast food in Jordan, and I got three awards
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 the past three years.
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, I worked in
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 hotel for five years, where I started in the front office as a receptionist,
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 I got promoted to front office manager.
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, I see myself as qualified for your restaurants. I can share with you my updated resume, my graduation certification, and my experience letters upon your request. Thanks for giving me
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 opportunity, which I will prove to you that you have chosen the right candidate. I would appreciate your feedback when you have a moment. Best Regards; Shadi Alkhatib

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task response
Be clear on the job you seek. Mention a specific title and a clear reason you fit it.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with a greeting, then say who you are and when you met. Then say the job and why you fit, and finish with a request.
language
Use short, simple words. Use full stops and commas where needed. Fix the closing: Best regards, and your name.
tone
Keep a polite tone throughout. Show you are ready to share more info like your resume.
content
You show your work history and awards to back up your claim.
tone
You keep a polite tone and thank the reader for the opportunity.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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