A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems might this difference cause? How might these problems be reduced?

Nowadays, many countries are living an improve in
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levels of livelihood, bringing richness and higher welfare for the
people
living in the major big
cities
.
However
,
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is generally concentrated for big
centres
, enlarging the already present gap between
cities
and rural
areas
. In
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essay I am going to discuss the possible consequences that
this
situation can create, spending the
second
part of the essay outlining solutions to reduce
this
issue. At
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level, the very
first
issue resulting from the rise in
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standard is the depopulation process that
people
living in rural
areas
do in
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to
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cities
. Generally, big
cities
can provide more
services
than remote
areas
and improve the aspectatives for a better life
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families. Living far from the major
cities
represent
less
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job opportunities, lower education and, in general terms, worse levels of livelihood for a family. An example, the
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in welfare in China had a big impact on
cities
like Pechin and Shanghai where the main industries are present.
This
general improvement pushed
people
from the rural east to
move
toward the big
centres
depopulating the whole eastern part of the country and overpopulating the western
cities
. To prevent
this
scenario a possible solution to adopt may consist in providing more
services
to rural
areas
. By setting
services
such
as hospitals, schools or factories in the nearby,
people
living far from the main industrial
centres
won't have to
move
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them to stay where they are.
For instance
, some Italian forward-looking
enterpreuners
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entrepreneurs
like Olivetti
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decided to settle them factories nearby the villages in a way that
people
living there wouldn't have to
move
too far to reach them. In conclusion, the general
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in
livelihood
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of a country may
means
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the depopulation of rural
centres
forcing
people
to
move
from their villages to reach the big
cities
. A possible action to adopt to reduce the gap between rural
areas
and industrial
centres
may be through the settlements of more
services
helping
people
not to
move
from their villages.
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