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Many people have complained about the large salaries paid to top executives of major companies. Why do you think top executives are so well paid? Do you think their large salaries are justified?

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When it is about the recruitment of any top-
level
 executive at a
company
, their salaries become higher than the average.
Besides
, a
company
 usually pay a large percentage of their salary only to a handful of
top
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level
employees
. It happens as individuals holding those posts have to take great responsibilities, make big decisions, possess their unique ways to generate incredible profit for the
company
 they are working for and so on. I think that they deserve a high payment for their unparalleled contributions to the
company
. It may sound weird that a top official should get a large payment than the ordinary
employees
 but the answer is critical. Generally,
the
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ordinary
employees
 work hard for hours and invest their manual labour to increase the production
level
. Certainly, their labour counts for the
company
's growth but at the end of the day, the decision made by the higher executives determines the fate of the
company
. On the other side, the job of a top official is mostly invisible to
the
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ordinary workers. The job responsibilities of a top executive may range from controlling the quality of production to dealing with the prestigious clients, setting up the marketing strategy for survival in
competition
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, planning for future product development, analysing the consumers’ needs, inventing newer products, making future plans, hiring and firing
employees
, tackling the market inflation and more. Actually, bearing
such
 responsibilities is not an easy task indeed. When an ordinary employee's responsibility ends when the clock ticks to 5, there is no schedule for a
top
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level
 employee.
Moreover
, if any of the steps turn into a failure, the top executive is to be liable, and so, he has to set some other strategies to overcome
such
 unwanted situations. But expecting
such
 fine-tuned results from the ordinary
employees
 is impossible. They are only trained to complete the production in time. If they are assigned with strategic roles, the entire
company
 will collapse within a short span of time. They lack the experience, skills and foreseeing capacities like the top executives. All things considered, I think hiring top executives with a larger salary is truly justified. They invest their labour, time and skills to improve the
company
's condition and remain behind the screen. In fact, without
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level
 employee's strategy or effective planning, it is not possible for any
company
 to sustain in the competitive market.
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