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Is it a fact that people nowadays are under a lot of pressure and their life are becoming increasingly stressful. What could be the possible reasons for this? What are some solutions to address this issue.

#fact #people #pressure #life #address
In
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contemporary
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majority
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the majority
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 of
people
 suffering from rising stress.
This
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 because it can directly
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 mental and sometimes physical health.
This
 essay will consider the main reasons
of
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 the stress abundance in
life
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the life
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 of
modernperson
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modern person
 before proposing two possible solutions. Perhaps the most important cause of stress is high standards in society. Envying others and trying to match them, even if it is beyond your
stength
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strength
 and trying to become ideal can ruin a person.
As a result
 under the
pressure
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 person fall into a deep depression. Another key factor is hiding distress feeling and worries. The huge number of
people
 consider, that using therapist services or just asking help is shameful.
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 means that they
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remain
 unsupported and alone with
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the problem
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,
for
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 generation Y. Fortunately,
however
, there are two
promosing
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promising
promoting
 solutions to
this
 problem. At
the
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first
people
 should be more tolerant and supportive.
This
 would change the public opinion and
people
 will be
sympathitic
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sympathetic
 about the sort-comings.
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 society should normalize visiting a psychologist or asking for help. After all, showing feelings doesn't mean that person is weak. In conclusion
people
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 mental health is a serious problem which is primarily caused. Fear of
beoming
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becoming
 mockery, along with
expectaion
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expectation
expectations
 of relatives and society. I
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 the opinion that human kinds should be more patient about other
people
's feelings.
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