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Band 6.5

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask other questions about the trip

Hello Mrs William, how are you doing? With a lot of excitement, I am writing
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 letter, expressing my interest in going on a three-day trip to Kingston
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 the children. What really motivated me to be a part of
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 journey was the thoughtfully laid out schedule and activities planned for these three days. The kids will be
knowing
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 about the history of
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 place with a mix of knowledge and fun; it truly intrigued me. I did my post-graduation from Queen's University and spent two years understanding the history of Kingston. I believe it could be a good opportunity for me to share my knowledge with the kids and contribute my bit to
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 adventure. I wanted to seek your guidance on how you will be deciding who all will be accompanying the children and what would be
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if we are shortlisted. Looking forward to your response. Best Wishes and Good Luck!

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structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Start with your wish to go, then say how you will help, then ask the questions, and finish with a polite closing.
greeting
Use a formal greeting like 'Dear Head Teacher' and finish with 'Yours sincerely' and your name.
paragraphing
Make each paragraph talk about one thing. This helps the reader follow your point.
content
The letter shows a clear wish to join the trip.
content
It gives some background to show what you can share.
tone
The tone is polite and kind.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic
  • valuable experience
  • expertise
  • educational objectives
  • supervision
  • ensure safety
  • bonding
  • workshops
  • logistics
  • coordinates
  • travel arrangements
  • clear communication
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • manage schedules
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