Some argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from internet and be educated from home. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

It is argued that nowadays, because of internet pupils can study at home and educational institutions
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not needed.
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essay disagrees with the statement that attending schools are not necessary.
Firstly
, students can
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social interactions in school and
secondly
, kids can
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engage
in some sports activities and get physical exercise.
To begin
with, school is a great place to have social interactions.
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is to say that, classes are in groups and children can make friends.
Moreover
, they learn face to face where they can
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interact
with
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directly and ask questions whenever they have confusion.
Thus
,
this
teaches a valuable skills
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helpful in
future
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career where they have to interact with many people.
For example
, kids have to work in groups in school and during
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they are required to interact with many students and give their input.
This
experience helps them in their future career when they work in any organization.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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