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in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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In the past few years, agriculture has got new technologies to enhance production still
people
 are struggling to get
food
 around the world. Poverty and distribution are the main reason for the problem.
However
, governments can give subsidies to foodstuff or provide financial aid to needy
people
.
Firstly
, if we look at the reason
people
 are still not getting bread and butter on their dining table. Poverty and distribution of
food
products
 are the main causes of
this
 trouble.
For instance
, big corporations and rich
people
 buy all the raw
food
products
 and store them into the big warehouses. So for their business to make more profit, they are only sending the little number of
products
 out in the market. when the demand increase and price of their
food
 item go up. In
this
 case, middlemen's make more money while common
people
 are suffering without proper feed. Because, when the price rises, it is hard to afford
food
 for common men or women.
On the other hand
, governments can play a vital role to overcome
this
 problem,they can give subsidies to
food
products
also
 can make a strict law on the storage of
food
products
.
For example
, the government of India buy crops from farmers and distribute to poor
people
 citizens every month.
Moreover
, there are strict laws about the storage of crops, no one can do storage more than certain limit or guidelines. To the sum up, after all the advancement into the agriculture sector and the rise into the production. There are some hungry
people
 everywhere around the world. The only way to solve
this
 problem is the government can help the community to get
food
 by giving financial aid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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