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People today can use internet to learn the life and culture of another country, so it cannot be necessary to travel to other country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Thanks to the
internet
, now
people
 can explore the
culture
 of other countries being in their own
country
.
Although
, some feel
this
 trend has been a positive development.
However
, I feel it has had a negative impact in three main areas of concern.
This
 essay will elucidate my logic with valid examples.
Firstly
,
people
 rely on the
internet
 a lot but it is good from knowledge perspective only because though a person might read and understand the
life
 and
culture
 of the foreign
country
 yet he cannot
experience
 the
culture
 by reading it because
people
 cannot be physically present to live their
life
 and
experience
 their original flavours of the cuisine. To illustrate, one can only try the best pasta if you are in Italy.
Thus
, travelling adds the real
experience
 of the
country
 rather than just reading about it.
Secondly
, individuals cannot explore the
life
 of
people
 from another
country
 until and unless they are present in that
country
.
Moreover
, by staying in their own
country
, it is not possible to explore new places, understand the dressing sense and imbibe their way of living.
Hence
,
people
 can see the world only if they prefer to travel.
Finally
, there is no way by which one can feel the weather without experiencing it. The atmosphere can only be felt by visiting that particular place.
For example
, if you are not in Canada you cannot know what -50 degree celsius feels like?. While being in our own land, we will not be able to judge the climatic changes. so reading is just not sufficient, travelling is more important. In conclusion, not only an individual can
experience
 the
culture
 by visiting the
country
 but
also
 explore and feel the cultural, as well as climatic changes, are different from their own
country
.
Therefore
,
although
 I acknowledge that today it is viable to understand the
life
 and
culture
 of various countries over the
internet
, I totally disagree that one can
experience
 the world just by reading over
internet
 and by not travelling to the place.
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