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Some people believe that the age limit for the drivers should be increased to ensure road safety. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In a recently concluded survey, it has been observed that almost 15000
people
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 die on
road
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 every year, and most of the accidents include
people
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 under the
age
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 of 30.
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, it is arguable that the
age
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 limit of
drivers
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 should be increased to ensure
road
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 safety.
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, increasing
age
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 limit has its advantages, I disagree with the notion of incrementing
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 barrier for
drivers
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 will eradicate
road
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 accidents, because irrespective of
age
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,
drivers
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 need proper training and should possess maturity while driving. Most of the public do not get into motor training schools for learning, they learn
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 skillset from someone they know like from brother or from parents.
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, they may omit some important parts of learning how to drive on roads: reading
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 signs and hand or light signals. Many mishap happen because the
drivers
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 in scene are not familiar with these signs they see while driving. Instances where many
people
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 don't know when to change lane by reading signal, and changing lane whenever they please causes unavoidable circumstances, where they couldn't get out and eventually injure themselves heavily or may die. Maturity while driving is an important aspect of any driver. Maturity does not comes with
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, it develops within oneself. Overspeeding and overtaking are prime reasons of accidents on roads, in which they may
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 succumb to death.
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, it is crucial to keep oneself calm and collected while they drive, and not rage their speed or overtake folks just for fun. We can get many instances where a person teases another driver on street, and in rage of teasing, they try to overtake by overspeeding causing the inevitable. In conclusion, I would disagree to some
people
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's notion about increasing
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 to ensure
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 safety. As a person, may be aged, who is not mature and in overspeeding and overtaking in a congested highways, will always involve in accident.
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, public, irrespective of their
age
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, should get proper training and education about
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 signs and hand signals, and the Government should ensure strict evaluation of motorist they are providing permit. They should
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 keep in their mind that there are few
people
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 waiting for them in their home.

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