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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 developing world, the topic which is about
children
 and their role in society is becoming a theme which most
people
 care. The argument whether the opportunity to choose everything should be given to
children
 or not is the topic which is both supported and refuted by many. A reasoned conclusion is drawn after analysing both sides of the argument. On the one hand, giving
children
freedom
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 to choose everything creates
such
people
 who only think of themselves and not care about society. What I mean by
this
 is that as we live in a place where
people
 should respect each other, the will of doing something that does hurt others makes
this
 world a place of selfish
people
. So,
children
 should be taught
form
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 childhood that their choices should not make other
people
 unhappy.
On the other hand
, depriving
children
from
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 choices makes them
people
 who do not have any
indivuality
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individuality
.
Thus
, there will be a great rise
of
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people
 who do not have their own opinion.
This
 situation makes
people
 dependent on dictators and others. All things considered, the idea that choices should not be given to
children
 cannot be supported.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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