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convinience foods will become increasingly prevelant and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparing. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Food
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 is an essential need for humans. In Yestern period, people preferred to cook it at home,
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 nowadays they are depending on convenient foodstuffs and many of them believe it will take place of conventional meals.
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, I agree with
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 notion. To commence with, there are numerous factors why people are using convenient
food
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 rather than making it by themselves.
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, working men and women they are busy in their hectic schedule and they do not have a much
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 to make their refreshments by traditional ways because it takes a long
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 for preparation while they can get the same
food
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 in a short
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 and they can make it within few minutes. To illustration, vegetables in the can they already boiled and mixed with spices in a can, what they do only fry it in the pan for a final touch.
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, it saves
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.
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, expenses are increasing day by day, rather than spend money on grocery, society can get it in low priced and it is easily available in every store.
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, the traditional way of cooking is a family activity,
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 student who are living alone, they always like the easiest way of
food
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 and the majority of the youngsters depend on readymade
food
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.
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, they can preserve these snacks for a long
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 inaccurate temperature.
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, if an individual lives far from his family, most of the mothers send lots of
food
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 to their kids when they go back to their institutions, as per their thinking, they can make it by themselves.
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, they will not learn how to cook
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 in the old method. To conclude, it is inevitable that, the use of traditional cuisine is dropping in the new generation and it is replacing by convenient
food
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