Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

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more and more popular in every country. Every country wants to become

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there are many other issues on earth itself that should be fixed before setting up human on

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should reduce their spendings on cosmos and support my opinion

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have some arguments.

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, many under-developed regions where people lack for basic necessities

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as food, transportation and employment should delay their universe exploration ideas.

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India has done very well in setting up own

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centres and less expensive

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shuttles but due to high population and less domestic production, their citizens are struggling for health and employment facilities and they are migrating to overseas causing brain drain.

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, with current

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issues more and more money should

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on climate change

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policies that can help to reduce pollution and makes

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a better place to live.

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, the glaciers in

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are melting due to global warming and causing floods and other disasters in nearby areas.

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, there are many

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that are fighting with terrorism and civil war,

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should spend money to protect

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lives and educate upcoming generations so that these issues should not arise in future. In conclusion,

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should spend more on their own people and help others that are in need and

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they can think about going to outer

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.5

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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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