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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

#space #exploration #money
Space
 research is
the
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gettting
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getting
 more and more popular in every country. Every country wants to become
leader
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a leader
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 in
this
,
however
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 there are many other issues on earth itself that should be fixed before setting up human on
space
. In my opinion,
countries
 should reduce their spendings on cosmos and support my opinion
i
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 have some arguments.
Firstly
, many under-developed regions where people lack for basic necessities
such
 as food, transportation and employment should delay their universe exploration ideas.
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 India has done very well in setting up own
reserch
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research
 centres and less expensive
space
 shuttles but due to high population and less domestic production, their citizens are struggling for health and employment facilities and they are migrating to overseas causing brain drain.
Secondly
, with current
environment
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 issues more and more money should
be spend
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 on climate change
change
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policies that can help to reduce pollution and makes
earth
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 a better place to live.
For instance
, the glaciers in
himalayas
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 are melting due to global warming and causing floods and other disasters in nearby areas.
Thirdly
, there are many
countries
 that are fighting with terrorism and civil war,
countries
 should spend money to protect
that
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 lives and educate upcoming generations so that these issues should not arise in future. In conclusion,
countries
 should spend more on their own people and help others that are in need and
then
 they can think about going to outer
space
.
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