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Some people think that books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days,there has been a heated argument about whether the
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 still having an essential source for knowledge and leisure.Some people believe that they are the main resources for these things while there are others who do not think that.From my own point of view,
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 losing some of their importance . On the one hand, for
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 time before the technology come up and the changes occurred in all life spheres the
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 were the only root for gaining information, and as an entertainment option.
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a lot of individuals going to the library to read
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 and studies and the number of libraries increased dramatically compared with these days.
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 great impact on our life,community,and country.
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, technologies have been played a vital role in the way of gaining knowledge.
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, the majority of the people are having a smartphone and
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 are stilling any book or game from the app.
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 survey conducted by the technical university of India revealed that almost 75% of the individuals using their mobile for reading and entertainment,which in turn result in fewer
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,journals,and magazines are selling, and the field of applications grown quickly. To sum up, after analysing both sides of the argument is not hard to see that, the advantages of increased technology outweigh the negative effects.
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