Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?

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cutting-edge technological era, the lifestyle of the individuals has been increased dramatically following the boost in their income.
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move an inadequate as cultural values are neglected. In my opinion,
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shift comprises more demerits than its merits. There are a plethora of reasons behind overlooking the cultural importance
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the inhabitants. The government in
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of the nations have enriched the civilians with mouth-watering salary packages that
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stimulate them to make their lives of couch and potatoes.
Consequently
, their visits to the devotional places and historical museums have been reduced significantly and
this
has given the birth to
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of religious emotions and moral values.
For example
, the youngsters belong to the rich families
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neglect the rituals that are performed during several family functions.
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, an eye-catching infrastructure proffered the higher authorities
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the public to dwell stagnant life and sometimes they spread their legs beyond the
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consequently
, the family conflicts come into existence as the adolescent
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of their elderly people in order to quench their thirst of spending lavishly on precious commodities or get thrilled with
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extravagant
recreational activities. To cite an example, the graduate student who already enjoys the company of rich folks children, tries to imitate their deeds like their visits to clubs and act of globetrotting which demands a catastrophic amount of finance,
as a result
, he battles with his parents to perform same activities. To conclude,
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, the enhanced standard of dwelling has
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the horizon of
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development, yet the loss of the moral emotions for the sake of growth cannot be ignored. According to my perspective, the legislators should pay heed to run campaigns in the educational institutes to grasp the nettle of elimination of cultural values.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • economic development
  • social values
  • materialism
  • community welfare
  • sustainable technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • social stratification
  • social cohesion
  • economic status
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