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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#computers #education
In
present
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the present
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 world, it is considered as
techonolgy
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technology
 plays a vital role in every
aspects
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 and
also
 nowadays gadgets like laptops are being used frequently in
school
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the school
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 curriculum, but it has certain drawbacks.
This
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
computers
 and provide a logical conclusion. One of the
prinicpal
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principal
 advantages of utilizing electronic appliances in primary
schools
 is self-reliance. Here,
current
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 generation especially younger
students
 are completely dependent on digital items like
computers
 and tablets on their studies.
Moreover
, many primary
schools
 making a trend to conduct teaching classes through these gadgets with the help of internet.
Infact
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In fact
, a majority of
students
 gathering necessary information about their research and they are
self dependent
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 to use these
applliances
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appliances
 in their course.
For Example
, many countries are conducting online classes to their
students
 with the help of
computers
 and
internet
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the internet
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 after
pandemic
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the pandemic
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. Despite these advantages, few individuals who are using
these device
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 in
schools
 are losing face to face interaction. Currently,
techonology
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technology
 is becoming as a drawback in student's education and in fitness level. They cannot communicate personally with other schoolmates or professors and resolves their queries regarding any assignments.
Hence
, many secondary school
students
 making
a
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misuse of
this
 device which effecting their grades in
there
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 curriculum and
sufering
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suffering
 from
health related
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 issues
such
 as eye vision and back problems.
For Instance
, In
India
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 a lot of
students
 who
is
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 attending online classes are not concentrating or
self focused
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 and wasting their precious time while
studing
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studying
 like surfing on
internet
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the internet
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. In Conclusion,
although
 personal interaction is missing in school education have certain negative effects, it has extremely
benefits
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 as well like student's
self determination
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 and systematic approach towards
computers
 and provides
a
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essiential
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essential
 data about their course. I personally believe that these benefits of using laptops frequently in
schools
outweights
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outweighs
 the disadvantages.
Submitted by Kishor on

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