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With easier access to the internet, many students are turning to online sources to study instead of libraries. State some of the problems caused by this and methods to address them

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These days modern breakthroughs and internet give students a lot of opportunities to learn with
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 way decrease the popularity of
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the old-fashioned
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 type of reading
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centers
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libraries
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convenient
 solutions and
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advice
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 problem. One of the main causes of
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 a choice in fear of online sources is
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 number of simple public
libraries
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.
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, in Aktau there are only 8-9
library
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centeres
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centres
 for more them 180000 people.
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Also
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 it takes too lot time to go to
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library
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a library
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 than just using internet sources or e-
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 in public
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, especially in small
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 these are small assort men of
books
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 and comfy reading zones where it's comfortable to chill and relax with reading.
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, in Kazakhstan
japanese
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 manga
comcs
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comics
 aren't so popular, that
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 demand among teenagers and students. In my personal view, the most suitable solution is to increase the number of
libraries
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 in every city.
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 should really care about
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the comfortable
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 distance between two
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centers
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. I can recommend
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 at least one
library
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 in two microdistrict or streets to keep the ideal and comfy distances for citizens.
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Furthermore
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 I advise to
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increase
 the number of
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 matter best
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soldiers
sailers
 or
books
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 of
non popular
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 authors, all of them must be in each
library
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centers
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. As I noticed, in Aktau we haven't got manga
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centers
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,
libraries
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 or just
books
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 of most
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 authors, That I prefer.
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, it will be plase
toorganize
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to organize
 some
competations
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competitions
 or parties, special weeks to keep
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 of visitors. I strongly believe that these solutions
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 will help to overcome
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 problem and students will notice that special places to feel reading.
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