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Band 6

You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

#facebook #friend #country #news #item #story #people
Dear John, How have you been?
Its
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 been so long since we were
last
 in touch on
facebook
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Facebook
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. I read your
facebook
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Facebook
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 message about news items in my
country
. I am very happy
share
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to share
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 the news about my
country
 with you. Recently in my
country
, one person made a
gusiness
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business
 world book record because he has a
super power
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 of weight lifting. He can lift
upto
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up to
 600kg and
that is
new
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 world record.
However
,
their
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 are some
another
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 news
rumoers
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rumours
 coming up about your
country
 president coming to see my nation's president.
Moreover
, people are so interested to see both the president on one stage because both nation's people
wants
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 to work together and it will be
alot
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a lot
 easier for both countries large and small businesses produce a product and ship one place to another and
this
 story relates to you because
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it's
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 easier for you to find a job in my
country
. I hope
this
 information
fulfill
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fulfil
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 your need and
i
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I
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 will see you soon.
your
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you're
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sincerly
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sincerely
, Dave
Submitted by Simranjeet Singh on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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