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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to student's sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree?

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It is said that educational institutes should distribute an equal quantity of funds to young individual's
sports
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 activities as they are distributing to the libraries. I highly agree with giving the funds in the same amount to the libraries as well as activities
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 as
sports
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. Because the
sports
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 field should be equally prioritized nowadays, due it having high demands in colleges and universities. Provided that lately there have been increasing amounts of young people opting for their careers in
sports
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 industries. Many university youngsters enter the educational institutes with
sports
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 scholarships, but due to not having up to date facilities, which often leads the students not to be able to reach their full potential, which leads them to not following their dream careers.
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 as pupil from the swimming team often can't continue their activities due to the lack of budget and proper facilities, so often leading them not to be able to reach their full potential.
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, educational academies shouldn't be biased to only academic pupil. In recent statistics, in the USA, there has been a drastic surge in young individuals pursuing professions in the
athletics
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 the right facilities can
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 help them reach their potential. In conclusion, due to the increasing amount of undergraduates opting for
athletics
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 fields as their future professions.
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, I highly agree with universities and colleges allocating the same budget to
athletics
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 industries as it is given to the libraries. Nowadays there is an equal rise in both academic and
athletics
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 undergraduate for the universities applications.
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