Some people believe that education success mostly depends on teachers. Others, however, say that it depends more on the attitude of students and their willingness to study. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is undeniable that fact that teachers might
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on their mind of
children
, and the
children
attitude can
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to their own
children
.
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, the most thing
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make
children
more satisfy with their result is to
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on their own aim. The major of parents think that their kid's
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consequences
about work is before teacher fault
thus
they do not teach them devoted. It just an advocate of the parents do not want their kid to have a shame
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of people.
That is
true that teacher can be the part of
children
failed, but it was only one-
third
of the reason why. The parents
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not pay much attention to their
children
to watching out them of their study and learn,
then
blame all on for the teacher
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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