In some countries, the widespread use of the internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

It is argued that in several countries, the development of
internet
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has allowed people to
peform
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perform
their job or attend school from
home
rather than going to
office
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or school.
This
essay agrees that there are more merits than demerits and presents that
this
saves
time
and increase performance despite having some
distractions
of working or studying from
home
.
To begin
with, when individuals
work
or study from
home
, they save their daily commute
time
.
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is to say that everyone spends
minimun
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minimum
two hours travelling to and from
office
to
home
but if they can
work
from
home
then
they save these valuable
time
which they can spend on meaningful activities
such
as families or personal hobbies.
For example
, according to a recent study by Times
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average individuals spend three hours daily to travel
office
or educational institution.
In addition
, working from
home
increases the performance of the students and
employes
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employees
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as they are in their own space. It is obvious that when a person is comfortable he can do things easily. To exemplify, at
home
the managers and
incharges
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charges
are not around to put unnecessary pressure and create
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environment so their efficiency is increased.
On the other hand
, the primary drawback of
home based
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online
work
and education is dealing with
distractions
. These
distractions
can be a noisy neighbour to
some one
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someone
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ringing the bell or unfinished household chores.
Therefore
,
such
things can interrupt the concentration on
work
or education and affect
the
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productivity.
This
results in incomplete
work
or poor output.
For instance
, The Business Times Newspaper published that there are more
distractions
at
home
than
in
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office
or college
sapce
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space
in terms of working from
home
and presented that
the
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productivity drops by 20%. In
conlcusion
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conclusion
, in numerous
countries
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,countries
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many individuals
work
from
home
and study online due to the technological advancement in
internet
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the internet
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.
This
essay believes that there
are
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more advantage than
the
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disavantage
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disadvantage
. Public saves their valuable
time
and the performance is increased despite the argument that there are many
distractions
present at
home
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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