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Thanks to low-cost airlines, many people can travel abroad. What advantages and disadvantages do tourists bring to the countries they visit?

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It is becoming
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 that the vast majority of
people
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 may seek the benefit from travelling to foreign
countries
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 in terms of unexpensive airlines in today's complex society. In
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 I am about to delve into some merits, as well as drawbacks, which can be brought about by travellers wandering
aroung
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around
 the world. On the one hand, it is utterly important for human beings to
go
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 sightseeing places in order to learn and get to know the world. Fortunately, nowadays anyone can go to far-off destinations via cheap charter flights. Looking at the bright side,
countries
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 can take advantage of
people
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 coming in during different seasons. One of the main advantages is a profit which the country could probably make from tourists.
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, through summer months, Turkey gains countless money from the touristic area,
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 Antalya. It is because
people
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 come on package holidays or all-in packages and they can get low-priced airlines.
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, it is inevitable that sightseers might
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wreck
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 havoc on
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 and foremost, tourists would possibly pollute the environment of the area in which they are visiting.
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, in the capital city of my country, it is available to see Arabian nation over winter months, who pollute every spot wherever they go. Another key factor is that foreigners might definitely affect badly on local
people
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. To put it simply, every region of the country has various customs and traditions, so there might be something which can be not welcomed by
aboriginal
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 community. The prime example of
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 is the way of dressing.
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, travellers may have a detrimental influence on
young
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 generation of the local
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. To conclude, as a coin has two sides, it is understandable that there are some beneficial sides of visiting places of interest,
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, several detriments, especially, affecting teenagers of the area, should not be ignored by the society. It is expected that most
countries
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 will try to do their best to enable tourists to visit by cheap airlines.
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