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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations

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Decisions are made for
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 of reasons. One of the critical steps people take in life is choosing where to
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 our everyday lives. In a simple sense, finding a job forms a vital aspect
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 a person's professional journey. What
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 serves as a bedrock to selecting
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"the wheres" and "whys" in terms of
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, organisational culture for most applicants is important and cannot be over-
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emphasized
. Some choose to
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 in a company that supports career progression.
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, an
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 officer becoming a Regional Manager in the future.
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, others might change companies for better opportunities and higher
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prerequisites
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 thoughts of whether to stay or leave might be in line with the policy. Whether it supports
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-life balance or not.
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, employees need a life after
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 as spending quality time with family.
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 forms a basis for their reasoning.
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, the attitude of Managers
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 stresses why a person might consider leaving or staying. As far as
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 am concerned,
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the attitudinal
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 barrier between them and their
surbodinates
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subordinates
 is another issue.
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 problems
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harrassment
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harassment
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 motivation plays is another key factor. While some job holders embrace intrinsic
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motivator
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 others prefer extrinsic. Suffice to add, the extent at which
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 satisfies a person determines either to stay or forge ahead in searching for more exciting opportunities in a new
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 arena.

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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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