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Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behavior and academic achievement. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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It is a debatable issue that whether school uniforms play
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 positive or negative role in student's life. The
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for its benefits state that it
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equality as well as encourage concentration on studies,
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 the opinion against it argue uniform discourage children as they lose control over their clothes. I agree
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 the former view, but I would present both sides of
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 in
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 essay. On the one hand, a pre-decided dress code at school encourage equality among students, boosts confidence, and
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subsequently

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improve academic performances. A mandatory uniform can hide the social and economical status of a child, which can help students from financially unstable families to feel equal and confident among their peers.
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 family can not
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branded clothes as his/her some peers, which make the incidents of bullying more obvious.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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