Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information?

The advancements in technology have changed every aspect of human life, and the
information
source
is one of them. People's interest is rapidly shifting from actual
books
to the
internet
for collecting data, because of the convenience and cost-effective measures it provides. I believe that in upcoming years the
internet
would totally replace
books
, reasons for which I would discuss in upcoming paragraphs.
First
of all, the
internet
has provided the unimaginable convenience of using an
information
source
, which is impossible to have while using the paper
book
. A
book
or any other
source
online can be carried along anywhere in mobile phone, without any extra effort ,unlike
books
. Along with it, a
book
can be downloaded on the go without any need to go to libraries to borrow it, which has
ease
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the fast-paced lifestyle.
Besides
, the audible
books
available online are
also
becoming popular, as they can be accessed while doing other tasks,
such
as gym, household chores and so on. Moving ahead, the cost-effective features of modern technology is attracting more and more people to switch to it. The printing cost of a
book
is very high which makes the prices go up, it discourage some consumers,
however
, publishing a
book
online is way cheaper than actual publication resulting in lower e-
book
prices.
This
is has encouraged both writers and reader to choose the
internet
rather than printed material, which would continue in future. In conclusion, the
internet
is becoming a more common
source
for retrieving
information
with its convenient and inexpensive approach
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and would replace the
book
as the main
source
of
information
.
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