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After graduation many students take a year to travel. Some think that it would be more useful to work for a year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many graduated young pupil take a
year
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 off to travel around different places. Few people think it would be more beneficial to
work
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 for a
year
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.
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 I agree that young learners should take a
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 off and travel after graduating, I
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 think that taking a
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 off to
work
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 is
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 a very valuable experience for young learners after being graduated. On the one hand, students getting a
year
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 off to travel around after graduation is a good way for them to earn an understanding. Many young learners can receive valuable experience through travelling around the world and learning new things. Graduated individuals can absorb a lot from their new surroundings,
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 as learning through different cultures and environments ,
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 they can
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 find a clearer view of their future career path through travelling to unique places.
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 in recent, statistics in the USA, it shows that students who have travelled after finishing their undergraduate, are more prone to finding the right career path. While a young pupil who continued their education after completing school are finding difficulty now to find their future prospects.
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, youngsters who start working for a
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 right away after graduating is
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 super beneficial for them. A lot of undergraduate use
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 opportunity to save money for
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 education and have a better insight into job life. Quite often youngsters choose to save money for their high education,
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, many undergraduate take a period of time off to
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,
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, they
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 gain valuable
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 understanding by
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, which helps them become mentally prepared for professional life in future.
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, in a recent interview with graduated students, it shows that many found it easy to do internships and get a permanent position in the corporate companies after taking a break to
work
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 a job. In conclusion, though I agree with youngsters travelling for 12 months to gain understanding and knowledge, I
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 think that young pupil working for 12 months after graduating and saving for
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 schooling is
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 a very smart choice
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