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In many places, new homes are needed, but only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
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In recent years the population of
cities
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 has dramatically grown due to the advancement of technology and industrialization which in turn reduces the lively places of
cities
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 and creates a need for building a home in villages. According to my perspective if all
people
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 migrate to the village it will cause serious problems in the ecosystem since countrysides are the backbone for food production.I will discuss the causes and give my opinion about the matter more in detail in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand,Modernization developed urban
areas
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 to provide a lot of job opportunities
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 addition,it improved the quality of life which attracts
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 from rural
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 to the
cities
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 side and results in over crowed
cities
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 and increase pollution.For ,example a software company in Bangalore attracts more than 10 million
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 every year with together a dying company in the same city limits harmful chemicals in the water.
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 we should create equal amenities in both rural and urban
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 which stops the migration of citizens to the countryside. On the flip side, significant goods are being created and exported from villages.There is a high chance of destroying agriculture plantation which affects the food chain process so we should be more careful when modernizing countryside.For ,instance the Research at California University states that 80% of food manufactured from villages.
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 to ,say Governments should regulate the movements and enforce a strict law not to pollute
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 around the industry. In conclusion, we should create diverse options to study and work in the countryside rather than moving to
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 and creating the need for overpopulated housing system.
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 we can encourage young
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 to know the importance of agriculture and make the village a lively place
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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