A number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans are superior and entitled to employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including food and research. Discuss both these options and form your own opinion.

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It's generally believed that
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and humans should live in harmony, but people usually threaten nature, that's why
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tend to agree with that statement and
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feel that we as a society should do something more to preserve our wildlife. The main argument in favour of the preservation of fauna is based on the idea that
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ensure and protect humans' life. If we give a more detailed look at different kinds of species,
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conviction is totally confirmed, for
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, bees are the most important ones because of their role in flowers pollination, without
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the humankind could be in danger and it could risk the extinction.
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argument in favour is that
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have feelings,
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we should not jeopardise their environment and their habitats,
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these beliefs could be questioned as it follows. There
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of reasons why people tend to think that humans play a more essential role in the globe than fauna.
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the main argument is that we as
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being have to survive and so we are
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justified
to eat
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' meat,
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it's certainly true that a diet without food that comes from
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is unthinkable.
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experts would argue, as
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read on an article of "The Economist", that not every animal is vital and indispensable, for our livelihood. The issue is very controversial and many times it
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ethical concerns about life and its sense, as far as
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am concerned the dichotomy between the two arguments must be sorted out, with the aim of prompting governments to enhance our well being as well as the
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' conditions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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