A person's worth nowadays, seems to be judged according to social statues and material possession. Old- fashion values such as honor, kidness and trust no longer seem important. Do what extent do you agree or disagree ?

People
value each other on the basis of properties and
assests
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assets
they possess whilst the moral
values
are ignored. I strongly disagree with
this
practise because moral
values
are
sign
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a sign
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of humanity and material possession are temporary.
Firstly
, humanity is
the
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major religion and crucial for mankind. Helping each other in hard times is the
first
responsibilty
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responsibility
of humans. In the time of problem or major calamity, kind
people
come forward to help. These
people
save lives of others and provide them
basic
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necessaties
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necessities
.
For instance
, when Nepal was facing
hardtime
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hard time
hard times
due to earthquake, kind
people
from all around the world help
population
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of Nepal by providing them food.
Therefore
,
the
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strong
values
are vital to
help
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each other and humanity.
Secondly
, moral
values
are permanent and stay with
people
for
the
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lifetime. Material possessions are temporary
people
may lose it.
People
with no
values
often lose money but with good
ethics
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this
can be earned.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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