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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Foreigners should pay more to visit historical buildings than the local people. I completely disagree with
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 statement because
everyone
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 has equal
rights
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 to see
this
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 and they have come from
a far
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afar
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 place and already spent a heavy
amount
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in
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of
on
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 travelling.
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, historical
places
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 are not personal properties so
everyone
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 has equal
rights
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on
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 it. These are the
assests
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assets
 of mankind. A single government and nation cannot state their complete right on it. If local pay less as
a
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an
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entry
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price
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,
this
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 is complete an unfair
practise
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practice
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. Travellers from all around the world have
same
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the same
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rights
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like
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as
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 them.
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, Taj Mahal ticket
price
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 is
same
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the same
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 for
everyone
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.
This
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 building was built by a Mughal emperor and a single government cannot have complete right
on
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to
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 it.
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, due to human
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rights
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,rights
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 there should be
same
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the same
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entry
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 prices for these.
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, travellers come from a different country and spend an enormous
amount
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 to reach these
places
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. They pay a huge
amount
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 to take flights and cabs.
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, they pay a huge
amount
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 for
accomodation
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accommodation
 too. If again a more
price
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 is asked for
entry
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 to these
places
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,
this
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 is not justified. A government's duty is to motivate tourists to travel again but not to demotivate them. A double or more
price
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 than local
residants
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residents
 is
source
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the source
a source
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 of demotivation.
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, a recent research state that tourists do not prefer those
places
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 which charge
double
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double-entry
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entry
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 prices from
foriegners
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foreigners
.
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, they already had paid huge charges to
finally
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 reach the destination,
same
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the same
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price
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 will be a treat for them to visit again. In conclusion, asking a more
price
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 from tourists from different countries is not a wise decision. They already paid huge expenses and it is
everyone
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's equal
rights
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 to visit these buildings.
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