Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money ? What other factors contribute towards happiness ?

Few people
accepts
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that
money
is the major element in
individuals
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an individuals
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life
and it can bring joyfulness in their
life
. In my opinion, surprisingly
happiness
cannot be purchased with currency in
this
world as well as there are some things which bring
lot
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a lot
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of
happiness
in a mankind
life
. On the one hand, What is the role of
money
in human
life
? According to my view, Every person wants to earn
money
to
fulfill
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their children and family needs. In fact, if parents can't give
happiness
to their kids
then
money
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the money
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is not worthy.
Moreover
, prosperous people spend their bucks lavishly on their children wedding,diamond
jewelleries
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jewellery
pieces of jewellery
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,designers clothing etc.
For Instance
, if children
is
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depressed with their marriage
then
obiviously
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obviously
spending all that
money
on
wedding
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a wedding
the wedding
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is inappropriate and
no
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use as they are not happy. So, Everything
is not relate
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to
money
in
perspective
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the perspective
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of
happiness
.
On the other hand
, Apart from
cash
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many other things can provide a lot of
happiness
that can
be describe
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be described
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. If people
prefers
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prefer
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to stay with family which could
result
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inresult
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them in
happiness
? In
this
context, Many persons
feels
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feel
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more happy
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happier
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to spend quality time at home along with their family especially with kids. It captures a lot of memorable moments while playing with them.
For Example
, On weekends every individual visits
restaurants
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restaurant
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, shopping malls, cinema with family as that leads to unique
happiness
to them because they enjoy each and every moment of
happiness
. In conclusion, I believe that
money
cannot buy all
happiness
and
also
staying with family,friends leads to
happiness
.
Submitted by Kishor on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promoting happiness
  • Essential factors
  • Financial stability
  • Material wealth
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Contentment
  • Basic needs
  • Maslow's hierarchy of needs
  • Social connections
  • Pursuing passions
  • Well-being
  • Mental health
  • Spiritual practices
  • Personal growth
  • Community service
  • Societal contribution
  • Philanthropy
  • Joy
  • Satisfaction
  • Prosperity
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