In some countries, online shopping is gradually replacing in-store shopping. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative impacts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In some countries, the question of whether online shopping should replace brick and mortar stores or not has received a great deal of public attention.

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online shopping has some problems, the merits will negate the drawbacks. There are several disadvantages for citizens to believe that online shopping should not replace in-store shopping.

first

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, since people can not touch and experience their good physically, they can be able to have some risks at shopping. In fact, some shop will send inferior products to buyers to earn a fortune in a deceptive way, which results in frustration's users.

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, by placing

order

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the order

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and completing an online transaction, the majority of people will be able to be victimized

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hi-tech crime, like

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thief.

this

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means that all profile of users will be sent to seller and hacker can steal

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information, which leads to users' information will be invaded and used for evil purposes. In conclusion, we can not deny that both sides are well-grounded. In my opinion, I side with online shopping is positive and it is

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advisable that we should consider both ways of shopping in each situation to choose the best choice.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

195 words

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In some countries, online shopping is gradually replacing in-store shopping. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative impacts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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