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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree ?

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undoubtedly,
clothes
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 are essential for the likelihood but designer
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 do highlight one's personality. Some individuals tend to claim that culture
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, as well as character of masses,
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character
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 of masses could be examined through the selection of their
clothes
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. I accord partially with the rendered notion.
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the reasoned conclusion . To inaugurate with,
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 appearance of a person reflects several things about his or her tradition.
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, traditional dress indicates the religion of a person and their devotional and spiritual nature. Muslim women,
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 an instance, usually wear the dress which covers their head and all their body which reveals about their culture.
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, the traditional dress
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 their identity through which
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 can easily guess their background.
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character
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 could not be predicted just from their costumes, which they choose to wear. To elaborate it more, sometimes people tend to follow the trend of
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 due to which nobody would be able to guess about their
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.
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, it misleads us various times, if we judge someone's
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 on the basis of outward appearance. In conclusion, I believe that one's way of dressing depicts
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spirituality among his or her culture as well as religion. whereas, most of the individuals use to follow the fashion, so
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 why their behaviour and nature both are unpredictable .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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