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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of traveling to a work place every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the lifestyle of
people
 has changed completely than in the past. There are many alternatives available for
people
 for selecting their
work
 location. Some
people
 believe that there are a lot of benefits when employees worked at
home
instead
 of working at the office. Personally, I strongly agree with
work
 from
home
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 strategy. There are many pros to it than cons.
To
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 with, the
first
 reason why
people
 should
work
 from
home
 is that it makes them feel comfortable. Because employees do not need to spend
time
 on transportation, it can reduce mental stress caused by crowded situations and hectic schedules which often makes them angry and annoying by the
time
 they reach office. One can effectively use
this
 saved
time
 on capability development.
Moreover
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people
 will have enough hours for pursuing their creative ideas and hobbies.
For example
, my sister used to
work
 at the office but due to COVID-19, her employer allowed her to
work
 from
home
.
This
 manipulation of the
work
 location has a positive impact on her as she is not only able to complete her assigned tasks but
also
 able to spend
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 of her
time
 with her kids. She can wake up late and use the moment for staying with herself. It helped her to be more motivated and happy.
Furthermore
, the
second
 striking reason is
people
 can manage the conferences very easily.
This
 is possible because of advancements in
the
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internet technologies and efficient audio and video conferencing tools. Virtual meetings have become
more
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 common thing in usual workday now. Employees can stay at
home
 and still get in touch with their customers as well as their colleagues with ease without dropping
quality
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 of interactions. Only occasional face to face meetings
are
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 necessary to keep the personal touch in-tact.
For instance
, my brother has been working from
home
 since COVID-19 outbreak. He can still do his
trainings
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 and daily
work related
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 meetings with the same fluency as in the past. Working from
home
 did not
changed
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 it a single bit. It only made his life easier. In conclusion, working at
home
 is the best solution for employment. They can gain many benefits from working online.
This
 can make them have more conveniences and allows them to be a well-organized workforce.
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