With the advent of social media, more people are getting their news online instead of from print media. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for people who read news online.

It is
well-established
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fact that with the invention of technology,
now
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most of the world acquires online
news
rather than the newspaper. Having online
media
would certainly
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effective method and overcome many global issues,
however
, there will be some disadvantages. There are several obvious benefits of using
the
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virtual
broadcast
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.
Firstly
, the biggest advantage of e-papers is that it is a faster medium for acquiring
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latest
news
than regular newspapers. If any activity
reported
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around the world that promptly updated on the online
media
in a short span of time.
Secondly
, Online
media
are immediately accessible and convenient. Individuals can read the
news
at any place and even several times.
For example
, the online newspaper can be read,
while
travelling from the metro, sitting in offices.
Although
, one can view a week or month-old
news
and
also
can download the archives of
the
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important
news
on their mobile phones, laptops and desktops.  
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks to online
media
. Older generation
people
are not comfortable
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reading e-papers, as compared to print
media
.
In other words
, as elderly
people
have plenty of free time,
so
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they read all the
news
very carefully.
Whereas
, e-papers
provides
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the highlight of current
news
happening around the world rather than smaller and more local
news
articles, which print
media
usually cover.
Furthermore
, to access online
media
it is a must to have an
internet
connection because without
internet
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people
have to rely on normal newspapers.
For example
, in smaller cities,
people
still do not have an
internet
connection because of high charges, so
people
have to depend on print
media
. In conclusion,
while
there are several positive aspects of having
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online
media
such
as easy accessibility,
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.
However
, it is not easily accessible to all age groups
as well
as
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it requires a large expense
of installing
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the
internet
and device.
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Expand on the points made in the paragraph about the drawbacks of online media to provide a more comprehensive analysis of the disadvantages.
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