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It Is Better For Young People To Get Advice From Old People Than Young Ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Now a days
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 every
things
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 around the world
has
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 been
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changing
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change
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changed
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 a lot from the past ,
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, the
behavior
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 and mindsets. I totally disagree with
this
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 statement because even in the past few years many
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have
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change
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somuch
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so much
 so some advice that old
people
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people
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generation
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Body paragraph 1
Old
people
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 with
alot
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a lot
 of things more than
young
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generation
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 of
people
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 so they need to
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what
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 of
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 said but
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 like that
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i
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 like that because the world always developing and always changing so
i
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 thought that young
people
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are know
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 better than old
people
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Body paragraph 2
On the other hands, if young
people
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 need
a advice
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advice
a piece of advice
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 about how to live in the society or how to be a good person old
people
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 might give
a better information
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better information
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instead
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 of asking the same
generation
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 of
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Conclusion
To
sumup
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sum up
, I disagree with
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 statement because the worlds always change and old
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 might don't know
alot
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a lot
 of things so it will be better if young
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 to old
people
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 of old
peole
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people
 give them a
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advice
advices
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advice
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