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Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live as a separate minority group with different lifestyles. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Today, with the passage of time every country is on the path of development and with
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 development there is a growing trend of visiting different places in different countries. There is a heated debate about whether immigrants should do and behave as the
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 of the
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 nation or they should keep their traditional lifestyle and live as a separate minority. In
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 essay, I will discuss the viewpoints of both supporters and opponents, as well as give my own opinion. On the one hand, a few
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 claim that there are many benefits of adopting the
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 countries’
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.
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 of all, it decreases the chances of misunderstanding and embarrassment for newcomers.
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, in Japan, it is offensive to sing or talk aloud in the evening, whereas it is common in Vietnam.
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, visitors establish a good relationship with local
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 because
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 can feel respected when their
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 are understood and imitated. They become a member of the
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 country and so they do not suffer from any culture shock.
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, there are many advantages to make a minority group. If a person is from a country with strong and old traditions, it will be difficult for him to adopt new
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. He cannot break old
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 as food habits or wearing certain types of clothes. In
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 cases, if he retains his old traditions and lives with his community as a separate minority, he won not suffer from homesickness. All in all, I think that a mutual understanding between both the visitors and the
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 countries is necessary to maintain harmony. In modern society in which everyone is tolerant of each other’s
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 and traditions are the need of the day.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integration: The process of combining into an integral whole; cultural or social integration into a new society.
  • harmonious: Marked by agreement in feeling, attitude, or action.
  • cultural exchange: The sharing and learning of different cultural practices and ideas among groups.
  • identity: The fact of being who or what a person or thing is; cultural identity relates to a sense of belonging to a culture.
  • multicultural: Relating to or including many different cultures.
  • assimilation: The process of taking in and fully integrating into another culture.
  • diversity: The inclusion of different types of people with different traits or cultures in a group or organization.
  • cultural understanding: Awareness and acceptance of different cultures.
  • minority group: A group of people who differ from the larger group in a society based on cultural, ethnic, religious, or linguistic traits.
  • cultural preservation: The act of maintaining and protecting cultural beliefs, practices, and languages.
  • social cohesion: The bonds or ‘glue’ that bring people in a society together.
  • cultural adaptation: Adjusting and adapting to a new culture without completely abandoning one's own cultural practices.
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