Please elaborate on your current physical and mental health, including any dental or oral treatment, medical interventions, and mental health therapy or counseling.
At present, I am grateful and feel blessed to say that I am currently not facing any significant health issues. My commitment to maintaining optimal health is evident through my active participation in sports, particularly basketball, from elementary school to high school. Throughout the pandemic and continuing until now, I have made a deliberate effort to prioritize physical activity by ensuring I walked over 10,000 steps on weekend mornings.
However
, I occasionally experience indigestion due to
irregular meal times. Hence
, since living alone, I have adopted a more consistent eating schedule, complemented by always keeping medications on hand every time I go out. Also
, I always try to be mindful of my plate, sorting out nutritious and balanced meals while
reducing sugar intake to maintain a healthy diet in the host country.
Being wary of lifestyle differences, especially in the UK or Singapore, where walking is more prevalent, I have adapted walking to the campus in Depok to minimize transportation costs. This
not only contributes to my physical activity but also
is more cost-efficient. Additionally
, I engage in weekly badminton sessions with friends as a lighter form of exercise. Looking ahead, I plan to continue doing sports in the host country, utilizing the sports facilities and park.
For mental health, I am well aware of its significance, since I faced some challenges during my first year of living alone. I had to accept being surrounded only by myself most of the time, but it was not that severe to do extensive counselling. I learned how to cope by watching my favourite YouTube channel, "Satu Persen". To focus on self-improvement, I dedicated more time to self-reflection and cultivating new habits.
Interestingly, I have developed a newfound interest in reading, using books to fill the void. Also
, incorporating self-journaling, I often express my days through video storytelling in English. Notably, my English language skills have improved significantly, from a previous score of 5.5 last
year in a mock test to a more fluent level. This
practice not only improved my language skills but also
served as a stress release.Submitted by shafatriviaa on
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