While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is often claimed by some people that the increase in Earth’s temperature is the worst issue faced by humanity in recent times, while others think that the forest destruction has a more detrimental effect on the world. In

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essay, I will discuss both views and explain why I believe deforestation is the most serious problem nowadays. On the one hand, ice sheets are melting

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a fast pace never seen before due to

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global warming. As an illustration of

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, a recent survey has shown that the world’s glaciers will much likely have disappeared within the

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century.

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, animals

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as polar bears which depend on

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environment to survive are facing an alarming risk of going extinct.

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, several people are suffering from natural disasters,

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severe floodings and storms.

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is because the rising temperatures provoke extreme weather conditions which change the climate.

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, deforestation is causing even worse consequences

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our planet. To start off, since forests play a vital role in absorbing carbon dioxide and releasing oxygen, its destruction means that the greenhouse gases will stay on the

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trapping heat from the Sun, leading ultimately to global warming.

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, several species are losing its habitats and becoming endangered by the constant cutting down of trees.

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, wholes ecosystems are being disrupted which is harming the biodiversity of our flora and fauna. In conclusion, even though global heating has a detrimental impact on the world, I believe that deforestation is a more critical issue because it not only contributes to the rise of Earth’s average temperature, but it

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harms a large number of animals.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Greenhouse effect
Industrial emissions
Sea levels
Extreme weather events
Biodiversity
Carbon emissions
Renewable energy
Paris Climate Accord
Carbon cycle
Soil erosion
Water cycles
Carbon sequestration
Reforestation
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