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Many people believe that learning a language at childhood is much easier than at adulthood. • Do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly stated that it is better for people
to begin
 to learn
to
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a
language
at
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 childhood than
at
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 adulthood. ı believe that
this
 view is correct and I will explain the reason why in
this
 essay.
First
 of all,
children
 mind absorb information more easily than mature. What I mean is ,if it is thought that the development of mental and
language
 is very fast in certain young age ,
such
 as 2 – 7 ages,
this
 period is ideal to learn a
language
.
Moreover
,
this
 development of mind makes
children
 have a bearing on learning.
Therefore
, learning will
also
 be fast as far as easy, if learning a
language
 is started at childhood. Another thing is that the fun and games
is
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most
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 important learning tools
at
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 childhood.
Children
 are naturally enthusiastic and can develop an interest in foreign languages through fun and games. Take
children
 playing a computer game whose main
language
 is English as an example; they can have the command of a
language
 quickly without realizing it by playing games.
Finally
,
children
 are not afraid of making grammatical or pronunciation mistakes, whereas adult people have often a fear of making mistake while they are speaking a new
language
.
This
 fear affects the development of people
language
 levels in a negative way.
in contrast
, as basically
children
 just repeat word and sentence in the way they hear them , they
is
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 in a better position at learning the new information . To summarize in the light of the information given above, I can confidently say that learning a new
language
 at
first
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 time of life is easier and fast than adulthood .
Submitted by Ahmet Münir KOCAMAN on

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