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Shopping habit of people depend largely on are group they belong to but here are other factories too agree or disagree ? If yes to what extant ?

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As we are living in a consumers world so we have a number of opportunities to buy new products. Some people have a belief that only age factor is the major cause of shopping but others have opposite views. I largely agree with the
second
 notion that people have many other reasons that influence their buying habits.
This
 essay will try to elaborate on the other possible factors that influenced shopping. To commence with, the financial status of individuals have a direct
impact
 on consumerism. A person has a good amount of money can easily afford any luxurious things without having any
second
 thought in their mind.
Secondly
, the need of accessories according to their occupation like some professions has a mandatory uniform for their workplace but many of them need casual
clothes
 so employees who work in
such
 field needs more pair of daily wearing
clothes
, as well as some higher educational institutions, has no restrictions on
clothes
 so workers and students like to look more attractive among their group and working place so they prefer to buy more trendy outfits.
Moreover
, gender is
also
 a great
impact
 on increasing numbers of shoppers. Here girls are more attracted towards new arrivals and many accessories as a comparison to the opposite gender.
Additionally
 the physical strains like when the height and weight increases
then
 definitely they need new size in their
clothes
. Apart from
this
, various age groups have a special area of requirements according to their taste and need.
For instance
, children prefer toys, youngsters like more trendy
clothes
 and elderly picks more comfortable things like night wears and equipment. To epilogue, the age factor has an
impact
 on the choices of the items but without any doubt a number of other factors
also
 there that has a great
impact
 to do shopping
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