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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 decades, we have witnessed a great breakthrough in technology. Typically, all kinds of traditional forms of reading
such
 as
books
 or printed
newspapers
 have gradually been replaced by using
internet
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. And it is predicted that people will totally read everything they want online
instead
 of purchasing printed
newspapers
 or
books
. I partly agree with that prediction, in some case, people
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opting
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 for
traditional
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 one. There is an indispensable fact that electronic
newspapers
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books
 bring a wide range of benefits for users.
First
 of all, thanks to
this
 modern way, we can effortlessly read everything we want whenever we own a private computer or mobile phone.
Secondly
, electronic newspaper and
books
 store a vast amount of information and stories, those ones will be opened quickly via a click of a button,
thus
 we freely select what we want to read or our
favorite
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 stories as well as the data we need for our researching.
Additionally
, electronic
books
 and
newspapers
 provide us with a plethora of reliable information without worrying to lose them.
Finally
, the most predominant advantage is that the online one hardly costs
fee
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 to access,just by enrolling the e-
newspapers
 or
books
 app in the mobile phone as well as computer,we can conveniently read them without charging.
However
,a minority of people still buy printed
newspapers
 or
books
 to meet the demand for their reading. Since they believe actual
newspapers
 or
books
 are the precious values of human beings which have been created by our ancestors in retrospect, overexploiting internet to read will gradually erode traditional values.
Furthermore
, bad connection to
internet
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 or the depletion of battery in your mobile phone will have
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 adverse effect on their reading process, that probably results in feeling a bit sense of anger To sum up, we have to give priority to utilize
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online
newspapers
 and
books
, but at the same time, we shouldn't entirely eliminate the traditional forms of reading.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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