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money offered for postgraduate research is limited; as a consequence, some people argue that financial support from the government should only be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects. do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly believed by many people that scientific
research
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 is much more important than
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research
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 and money should be only divided for scientific
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. I firmly disagree with
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 opinion and I think that money should be apportioned for both scientific
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 and
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research
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. In the following paragraphs, I shall put forth my arguments to support my views.
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 of all, I believe that scientific
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 is quite significant, but it is never everything in today’s modern world. Even if scientific
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 leads
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 the development of technology and science, postgraduate
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 plays a very important role
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 individual skills.
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, it may help to become distant from the era of consumption. Take people who are researchers in any country as an example; if postgraduate
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 is supported by governments, scientific activities may easily be maintained and researchers could gain academic and educational qualification for their future career.
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, there is no doubt that supporting postgraduate
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 may end in some new work opportunities.
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research
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 could soften the side effects of unemployment, which result in dramatically decreasing the level of unemployment.
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, the income level of
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society can increase
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 offered by the government for postgraduate scientific
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 is necessary to improve the quality of life. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the budget of the government should
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 be divided for postgraduate scientific
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 because
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 investment contributed to both technological
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 and new job opportunities.
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