In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fastfood. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

consuming too much instant
food
is elevating the number of health issues to individuals in some Nations. So it is believed that authorities should put
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tax on
these variety
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of using. In my
opinion
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I agree up to
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certain extent with the given statement because
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the charges are the lesser the consumption will.
Although
such
high taxes will impact on fast
food
industries.
To begin
with, rising number of individuals are suffering from health issues like obesity, cardiac problems, blood pressure and so on, due to consumption of canned
food
in some Nations, because of the busy life schedule
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of the masses prefer to eat packed
food
. So keeping all the sand mine authority should take action towards the reduction of consumption. Should put Taxes. It may bring down to get rid of
this
problem at some level. On the other side coma paying high tax amount to the government will impact
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the employment specialist those who are surviving on
this
work as street
food
vendor so it cannot be possible for all to pay tax by income to conclude fast
food
is easily available but harmful to health so, I believe that exercise should be judicious on fast
food
industries.
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