In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fastfood. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
consuming too much instant
food
is elevating the number of health issues to individuals in some Nations. So it is believed that authorities should put maximum
tax on Add an article
a maximum
the maximum
these variety
of using. In my Change the determiner
this variety
these varieties
opinion
I agree up to Add a comma
,opinion
the
certain extent with the given statement because Change the article
a
higher
the charges are the lesser the consumption will. Add an article
the higher
Although
such
high taxes will impact on fast food
industries. To begin
with, rising number of individuals are suffering from health issues like obesity, cardiac problems, blood pressure and so on, due to consumption of canned food
in some Nations, because of the busy life schedule Replace the word
most
mostly
of the masses prefer to eat packed Correct your spelling
most
food
. So keeping all the sand mine authority should take action towards the reduction of consumption. Should put Taxes. It may bring down to get rid of this
problem at some level. On the other side coma paying high tax amount to the government will impact on
the employment specialist those who are surviving on Change preposition
apply
this
work as street food
vendor so it cannot be possible for all to pay tax by income to conclude fast food
is easily available but harmful to health so, I believe that exercise should be judicious on fast food
industries.Submitted by rajeev kumar on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite